Mrs Bratherton was given a very special artefact for us to look at in our lesson, it was a real extract from the diary of Sameul Pepys! We read his writing and marked it with 2 stars and a wish. We thought that he used his senses really well, he had some adventurous vocabulary and had used some connectives. We decided that he needed to use different, more exciting sentence openers and add more detail using higher level connectives.

"I could see the toxic, acrid smoke in the distance, which was rapidly engulfing our city."

We uplevelled Samuel Pepys' writing and used the wish we had given him to improve, to help make our writing better....Sentence Openers.

A real extract from the diary of Samuel Pepys.

Using An Artefact....